Hi Hey... great renders to start your final year with... very impressive. I have some very minor comments if you are interested. Obviously just delete them if you wish.
1. It's great to see the design in context with a background. However, the rendered Betula have an ephemeral quality, a wispiness that is overpowered by the background. They are washed out when compared with the ground planting and Laurel boxes and would benefit from stronger definition.
2. It's good to see people in the design, but if the people are within the space, rather than on the periphery, it gives a better vertical indication of scale. It is difficult to judge what the vertical scale of the white stone void is and the fenced void itself. The Betula also give a feeling of being below head height along the path although the annotation list 180-200mm clear stem.
3. Clipped Laurel boxes... clipping Laurel is generally not a good idea due to the size of the leaves. Unless each branch is clipped to length separately, the result is generally a finished surface of half cut leaves. Smaller leaf genus tend to work better. If you intend to clip each branch separately it needs to be stated in the annotation so the judges understand your intentions.
4. You have an area of open void to balance the black reflective pool that is left bare. I'm not sure this argument works as well as the rest of the design. I can see where you are coming from but the space above an area of water is probably the strongest analogy for 'void' in landscape design without digging a hole, as the space cannot be entered. it is very robust in this respect. Also, judges are not keen on open ground as they tend to be weed propagation areas. If these areas are mulched, it needs to be stated in the annotation. I think it will be difficult to stand your ground on this detail. There is also a lot of white space in the plan with no annotation. It looks like you intend to use a leaf mulch but it is not clear and the judges need to be told what is in this space.
5. It's great to see elevations with some perspective... it really brings them to life. But they can also catch you out in the detail as it's possible to see so much more. 'Inside the Void 2' shows a polished granite/concrete or water surface but the plan reads as planting and the plan is not rendered. 'Inside the Void 2' also shows an empty space, but the plan shows Betula within the void. Also the crunchy path annotated in the plan is not rendered in the perspective view of Void 2. I hope you don't mind me raising these, really picky, points, and feel free to delete them if you wish, but I thought it worth raising them as you have obviously done a lot of work to produce a great product. Really can't wait to see your final work next semester!!!
Sorry it's taken an age to get back to you, to be honest I have been really slack with keeping up to date with my blog, seems at the moment like an added extra that I could do without! Due to me not being on here enough, I hadn't realised until now that you had left a comment! So thank you for your feedback and sorry again for the delay! I totally agree with every point you raised, and having just had a quick look at your blog I can see you definitely know what your talking about! I've been putting stuff up here to be honest thinking nobody was looking except maybe Jamie at the end, so thanks again for taking the time. Any other feedback, comments or andvice you can give I would be happy to take.
How long ago were you at Greenwich? What are you doing now? Where dif you leasrn your photoshop skills? It can't have just been at Greenwich!
Hi
ReplyDeleteHey... great renders to start your final year with... very impressive. I have some very minor comments if you are interested. Obviously just delete them if you wish.
1. It's great to see the design in context with a background. However, the rendered Betula have an ephemeral quality, a wispiness that is overpowered by the background. They are washed out when compared with the ground planting and Laurel boxes and would benefit from stronger definition.
2. It's good to see people in the design, but if the people are within the space, rather than on the periphery, it gives a better vertical indication of scale. It is difficult to judge what the vertical scale of the white stone void is and the fenced void itself. The Betula also give a feeling of being below head height along the path although the annotation list 180-200mm clear stem.
3. Clipped Laurel boxes... clipping Laurel is generally not a good idea due to the size of the leaves. Unless each branch is clipped to length separately, the result is generally a finished surface of half cut leaves. Smaller leaf genus tend to work better. If you intend to clip each branch separately it needs to be stated in the annotation so the judges understand your intentions.
4. You have an area of open void to balance the black reflective pool that is left bare. I'm not sure this argument works as well as the rest of the design. I can see where you are coming from but the space above an area of water is probably the strongest analogy for 'void' in landscape design without digging a hole, as the space cannot be entered. it is very robust in this respect.
Also, judges are not keen on open ground as they tend to be weed propagation areas. If these areas are mulched, it needs to be stated in the annotation. I think it will be difficult to stand your ground on this detail. There is also a lot of white space in the plan with no annotation. It looks like you intend to use a leaf mulch but it is not clear and the judges need to be told what is in this space.
5. It's great to see elevations with some perspective... it really brings them to life. But they can also catch you out in the detail as it's possible to see so much more. 'Inside the Void 2' shows a polished granite/concrete or water surface but the plan reads as planting and the plan is not rendered. 'Inside the Void 2' also shows an empty space, but the plan shows Betula within the void. Also the crunchy path annotated in the plan is not rendered in the perspective view of Void 2.
I hope you don't mind me raising these, really picky, points, and feel free to delete them if you wish, but I thought it worth raising them as you have obviously done a lot of work to produce a great product. Really can't wait to see your final work next semester!!!
Regards
Paul... ex Greenwich student
Hi Paul,
DeleteSorry it's taken an age to get back to you, to be honest I have been really slack with keeping up to date with my blog, seems at the moment like an added extra that I could do without! Due to me not being on here enough, I hadn't realised until now that you had left a comment! So thank you for your feedback and sorry again for the delay!
I totally agree with every point you raised, and having just had a quick look at your blog I can see you definitely know what your talking about! I've been putting stuff up here to be honest thinking nobody was looking except maybe Jamie at the end, so thanks again for taking the time.
Any other feedback, comments or andvice you can give I would be happy to take.
How long ago were you at Greenwich? What are you doing now? Where dif you leasrn your photoshop skills? It can't have just been at Greenwich!
Regards,
Matt